The Order of Things

[JohnyDarko]

My first piece in a long while, and on this site. Short as always, but 'the less you see the more you know'

The Order of Things

We all fit in like a piece in the puzzle,
or don a big cone and tight leather muzzle
We never stick out or make a big fuss,
because we fear the back of the bus
It can be said we have reached perfection,
simply because we avoid all detection.
That’s all there is on the topic of ‘we’,
and I’m so glad that we isn’t me

[SÀMMIUS McGENNIEN]

This is a very interesting piece, and I rather enjoyed it. I like how you are incorporating "we" as "general society" (at least, that is what I interpret; what is the meaning, in fact?) and then detach yourself from that general society. You are disassociating yourself from conformity, yes? And the rhythm...I really enjoy the rhythm. It's very calmed and relaxed, but it still carries a very serious tone.

I...I'm not sure how to provide a better analysis, at this point. (I do apologise. This summer program has really wiped my patience with analysing stuff, as it's been done all too often.) Bravo.

[JohnyDarko]

The analysis was longer than the poem, so you are doing good. Spot on as well. I will get around to tearing apart all of the poems here, as soon as I work out some other things online. And yes, 'we' is general society. It was a little E. E. cummings trick I picked up from "anyone lived in a pretty how town" in which the characters names are Anyone and Noone written in lowercase. I thought having a pronoun that includes me, turning into just a word or name for everyone else was just fitting way to break off and find individualism in the face of opposition. .-. I usually don't interpret my own work...but english class does things to a man....